I worked on flashback scenes this time. There are only two and they take place one after the other in the story. I don't care much for flashbacks but they are needed to show a character things that happened in her ancestor's past and their effect on the present.
Here's the excerpt:
Obasi came to with
a low moan but had no idea how long he lay unaware on the ground. It was
painful to move but he turned onto his side and realized the reed mat beneath
him was soaked in his blood. He probed his shoulder wound with the fingers of
his right hand and winced. It was crusted a little so he knew to pack it with
grasses to staunch any further bleeding. There were plenty only a few feet away
and so he half dragged, half crawled over to them. The back of his head ached
too, likely from impacting the ground when he fell at the last.
He further realized it was quiet…too quiet. He
heard no sounds of hooves or shouting or clashing of weapons. Even the insects
were silent.
Where are the men? What happened to the
villagers?
He frowned when
he saw the billows of white and grey smoke rising from the village. He feared
for his tribal family.
There were many
scuff marks on the ground to indicate the battle was fierce. Blood, sweat, and
smoke still clung to the air so he decided he wasn’t out for very long. Continuing
to shove the grasses against his wound, he noticed something dark in the bushes
just beyond reach. He concentrated his focus and realized he it was a man’s
foot sticking out from beneath.
Crawling closer,
he was able to trace the foot to a leg and then a thigh. There he paused
because he recognized the scarification sigil on that thigh. It belonged to one
of the drummers who fled the scene when the conquistador shot his pistol.
Obasi gathered his
inner strength and said a prayer for help as he grasped the leg and pulled. It
was indeed attached to the rest of the poor man’s body but was too heavy and at
the wrong angle for the priest to pull him free of the foliage.
He wormed his
way beneath the branches to get closer. One look at the man’s ruined face made
him stop. There was no way any mortal could survive that kind of damage. Bone
and cartilage reflected the fading sunlight; there were a handful of teeth
scattered to one side like kernels of discarded corn.
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